Hope and Clunbury Video Conferencing
16 11 2006
We’re going to try some videoconferencing this afternoon with Clunbury school.
Enter the videoconferencing room here
Hope pupils, what did you think about the Clunbury School reports?
Note the person’s name you’re commenting on. What did you think of the use of the:
1) Headline;
2) Introduction which told a story;
3) Events in time order (and past tense);
4) Quotes and reported speech;
5) Passive voice.
Stephanie’s report was really good, It had a introductory scentence, A head-line, Events in time order adn Quotes and reported speech. It was one of the best.
Stephany’s report
I thought it was good it had a catchy headline loads of information which was interesting, there was reported speech and direct speech and passive voice
Connie’s report had a head-line an introdutory scentence adn quotes and reported speech.
Jordie
Your newspaper report had a introduction which told the story, it had passive voice, a good headline, reported speech and direct speech
Jordie’s report had the date whitch not many other repots had, a head-line adn quotes and repored speech.
connie’s report was very good, the headlined was good, there was passive voice in it, it had reportedspeech and a introduction telling the story
Amaya’s report was really good It had Detail wich wads short and interesting so you would keep reading, date, headline and an introductory scentence and it was very informative.
Connies report
Hi Connie
I thought that your report was really good Because you had a Headline, Interviews and it sounded like a report you allso had passive voice. Oh and an Intro that tells the story. Well done
Chloe
I thought that Stephanys report on clunburys day out was realy good. There was good use of the passive voice and i was allso in the past tense. There wasen’t any personal pronouns either. and there were some realy good quotes.
Will’s report had a date, a headline, passive voice and it was very interesting
To Conny
Your head line was short and not that catchy
Intro told whole story
Could of done a bit more on that but good try
Exelant on reported speech and quotes
Not so good
Amaya’s report
there was a headline, a introduction which told the story , some reported speech (the quotes) and some passive voice altogether it was really good and interesting just like a newspaper report
Dear clumbury
I thought that bens report was really good because it had the date whitch not many others had a brill headline whitch can draw people in. I also really liked the way you interviewed people like saying so and so said…
you had also a good introduction.
Jess
Sarah’s report had a head-line An introductory scentence, detial, quotes and a good finish.
will’s report
the headline was catchy and there was an introduction which told the story at the beginning, there was passive voice in the report and some reported speech (the quotes)
Coney
1)Headline very good. Not so catchy
2)Introduction, Perfect tells loads
3)Not so much but a bit
4)A few bits
5)Quite a bit
Stephanie
Headline Perfect. Catchy
Introduction, Excellent tells everything.
3) Not much
4) Few
5)a lot
Jorde
Headline Perfect. Very Catchy
Introduction, Excellent tells most
3) Not much
4) Good
5)Loads
Amy
Headline Perfect. Not so catchy
Introduction, super tells almost everything
3) Very Good
4) All right
5)Loads
Maya
Headline Perfect. Catchy Alliteration
Introduction, Excellent tells everything.
3) Some
4) All right
5)Hit the jackpot!
Will
Headline Perfect. Catchy
Introduction, Excellent tells everything.
3) Some
4) All right
5)Loads
Sahara
Headline Perfect. Catchy
Introduction, Excellent tells everything.
3) Some
4) All right
5)Loads
Ben
Headline Perfect. Catchy
Introduction, Excellent tells everything.
3) Some
4) All right
5)Loads
Lewis
Headline Perfect. Catchy
Introduction, Excellent tells everything.
3) Some
4) All right
5)Loads
Melissa
Headline Perfect. Catchy
Introduction, Excellent tells everything.
3) Some
4) All right
5)Loads
Katie’s report had a head-line, an introductory scentence, events in time order and quotes and reported speech.
Sarahs report
there was a catchy headline which dragged you into the report there was a good introduction there was reported speech in the quotes.
To Sarah,
I liked your report although I didn’t hear any passive voice or reported speech.
stephany
i like your quotes and the head line
Stephanys report
Hi Stephany
I thought that your report was brill because it had Headline, Intro that tells the story, Intro that tells the story, Infomation, Interviews, Quotes, and it sounded like a report. Well done it was cool
Chloe
Ben’s report had a good head-line using alliteration an introductary scentence interesting detail and events in time order.
to gordy
i think you introduction was good and it tells the story
Louise’s report had a good introduction, lots of detail it was interesting and it was not to long.
To Stepheny
Headline perfect, catchy
Intro told evrey thing
Not much
Few
A bit
stephany your report was fab, it told all the story, it had a good headline,it had lots of information and it wa interesting it had some passive voice in it had some rreported speech and direct speech.
Jordys report
Your report had Fab Headline, Quotes, Interviews and It sounded like a report a bit but you could have read it a bit slower. well done
Chloe
Katies report
the headline was good it was really catchy, the was a introduction which told the story there was time order in the first part of the newspaper report
there was direct speech and reported speech, in the quotes.
Mellissa’s report had a short introduction woich told the whole story, it had quotes and reported speech, lots of detail and it was very interesting.
to amayer
good head line and passive voice i like how you set the stoy .
Dear amaya
your report was good it had and good headline and introduction. Then you had a lot of discribing words also facts. ou also iterviewed some people like saying so and so said…
Jess from hope
Bens report
there was a headline some passive voice, quotes reported speech and direct speech
to will
i like your introdution and it is in time order
jordies report your report was fantastic, it had a good headline
Louise’s report
there was a excellent headline some passive voice and reported speech
To Melissa,
Nice headline, some reported speech. Passive voice! Good summary no quotes though.
to katey
your report told the hole story and was realy good
Melissa’s report
there was a good headline, a introduction that tells the story, and reported speech and lots of good quotes
To Jordy
Head line was Good
Intro told evrey thing
In time order a bit
Report text and quotes were good
Needed a bit of work
Amayas Report
Your report had A good Headline,Intro that tells the story, Info, Oh and interviews your report was cool.
Chloe
to ben
i like you head line and it is in time orlder and it has quote
To Will,
Good report, but I only heard a headline, summary and reported speech.
louie
your story is in time olrder and a good head line
to sarah
i like you head line and you have passive voice and your quotes
Amayas reprot it was very good ,it had reported speach
to mliser
i like your head line and you have reported speach
To Amy
Headline was good
Intro told whole story
Good in time order
Quotes and report text was good
Not so much
dear will
Good quots and listings of music good
Wills Report
Your report Had a cool Headline, Intro that tells the story, Interviews and it sounded like a report. It was brill
dear stef
i really liked your headline and the reported speach in your report
To Stephany,
Excellent report, nice headline. Good reported speech. Your summary tells the whole story too. And there’s quotes. No passive voice though.
To Jodie,
The Headline was clear, good summary. Some personal pronouns!!!
Connie
great report but I noticed headline, summary, past tence and passive voice also pesonal pronouns
Sarahs Report
Your report Had headline ,intro,info, interviews and sounded like a report. Well done thet was brill. keep it up.
Chloe
dear sarha
I liked the way you introdushed yourself it was a brill report
To Will
Headline needed to be more catchy
Intro told a bit of the story
In time order
Good on report speech
Not so good
will your report was very good it had reported speech
sarah your report was good it had a very good headline
Hi loise
i loved your report you also read it really nice cool
katie your report was fab it told all the story
ben your report was fantastic it had very good
quotes
louise your report was fab it had reported speech
Stephanie
A very good headline, nice introduction. Good reported speech and some personal pronouns.
melissa your report was very good it had a very good headline
katie,
You had passive voice it woiuld have been better if you had of done some quotes
Jordy
I like your Headline but you’ve got some personal pronouns in it.
kATIES REPORT
HI KATIE
YOUR REPORT WAS FAB BECAUSE YOU HAD A COOL HEADLINE + AN INTRO THAT TELLS THE WHOLE STORY OH AND IT SOUNDED LIKE A REPORT ASWELL KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK
CHECK OUT HOPES BLOG
CHLOE
Bens report
hi ben
your report was good because it had headline +an intro that tells the story+ passive voice +interviews and it sounded like a report
chloe
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connie i like your head line and it was good to your passvoice it was good to
Connie
Reported speech
Good introduction
Did you have any quotes?
Stephanie
Good headline-short catchy.
You had quotes.
Jordie
Good headline.
Interesting.
Quotes good
Amaya
There was detail.
A introduction.
Will
Was there a headline,
and introduction?
Sarah
Good headline.
Introduction.
Explanation.
Quotes.
Long but not to long.
stephany i really like your head line it was great
Hi Pupils at Clunbury school! (and Mr Davis)
Thanks very much for all the super comments you’ve posted on our blog. Hope you found our comments useful to make all your excellent reports even better, and that you enjoyed using videoconferencing as part of our literacy lessons.
Best wishes,
Mr Rowe and Class 2 (Hope School)